routine polishing

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Reed Esau
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@@ -18,8 +18,8 @@ overuse, at least according to usage experts.
For example, if _wordy_ highlights `moreover` in your document, a word for For example, if _wordy_ highlights `moreover` in your document, a word for
which no good usage exists, you should consider a rewrite to eliminate it. which no good usage exists, you should consider a rewrite to eliminate it.
But if it highlights `therefore` in a sentence, you can elect to keep it But if it highlights `therefore` in a sentence where you can demonstrate
—_wordy_ be damned. the usage is sound, you can elect to keep it —_wordy_ be damned.
## Why _wordy_? ## Why _wordy_?
@@ -79,7 +79,7 @@ enter the command:
:LazyWordy :LazyWordy
``` ```
Lazy and weak words are common in first drafts. Weak and lazy words common in first drafts.
We sabotage our writing though weak language, kicking the legs out from We sabotage our writing though weak language, kicking the legs out from
beneath our verbs and tearing at the foundations of our nouns, watering beneath our verbs and tearing at the foundations of our nouns, watering
@@ -113,9 +113,9 @@ Why plan when you can plan ahead? Why need a thought to occur to me
when the thought can merely occur? when the thought can merely occur?
But redundancies may not actually be redundant: invited guests may not But redundancies may not actually be redundant: invited guests may not
be redundant if some of the guests have crashed your event. Or dialect if some of the guests have crashed your event. Or dialect differences can
differences can erase redundancies, as the British will protest against erase redundancies, as the British will protest against where Americans
where Americans may simply protest. may simply protest.
### Puffery and Jargonese ### Puffery and Jargonese
@@ -131,8 +131,8 @@ where Americans may simply protest.
Instead of puffery, demonstrate through details. Instead of puffery, demonstrate through details.
* “The Empire State Building is _breathtakingly_ tall.” (puffery) * “The Empire State Building is _breathtakingly_ tall.” (puffery)
* “My ears popped several times during the rapid elevator ride * “My ears popped several times during the rapid elevator ride to the 80th
to 80th floor.” (better) floor.” (better)
### Manipulative language ### Manipulative language
@@ -147,7 +147,6 @@ where none has been earned.
* “mistakes were made” * “mistakes were made”
* “discounted up to 50% off” * “discounted up to 50% off”
* “most voters feel that my opponent cant be trusted” * “most voters feel that my opponent cant be trusted”
* “its widely thought among voters that my opponent is not trustworthy”
Assuming that youre not consciously trying to manipulate others, you will Assuming that youre not consciously trying to manipulate others, you will
seek to purge such loaded language from your writing. seek to purge such loaded language from your writing.