From bb0371a8beb04caa5e9c8db068c235cbb7f94891 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Reed Esau Date: Fri, 17 Jan 2014 09:01:11 -0700 Subject: [PATCH] fixing problems --- README.markdown | 8 ++++---- 1 file changed, 4 insertions(+), 4 deletions(-) diff --git a/README.markdown b/README.markdown index f1e4ce5..b621325 100644 --- a/README.markdown +++ b/README.markdown @@ -131,7 +131,7 @@ where Americans may simply ‘protest’. Instead of puffery, demonstrate through details. * “The Empire State Building is _breathtakingly_ tall.” (puffery) -* “My ears popped several times during the rapid minute-long elevator ride +* “My ears popped several times during the rapid elevator ride to 80th floor.” (better) ### Manipulative language @@ -141,8 +141,8 @@ Instead of puffery, demonstrate through details. ``` Words can be used to hide or obscure a weak position, or to cast doubt on -a strong one. They can be used to mislead, to evade blame, to claim credit, -as well as to cast doubt on a strong one. +a strong one. They can be used to mislead, to evade blame, or to claim credit +where none has been earned. * “mistakes were made” * “discounted up to 50% off” @@ -150,7 +150,7 @@ as well as to cast doubt on a strong one. * “it’s widely thought among voters that my opponent is not trustworthy” Assuming that you’re not consciously trying to manipulate others, you will -seek to purge such loaded words from your writing. +seek to purge such loaded language from your writing. ### Forms of to be